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More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to acess information. So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary world, advancement in
technology
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 has changed the way
public
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acquire
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acquires
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 information. An
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ever-increasing
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ever- increasing
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ever-increasing
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 number of individuals are utilizing electronic apparatus
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 as tablets, computers and laptops. Several
individual
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 opine that there is no need to print traditional hard copies of newspapers, books and magazines. I firmly believe that
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 statement does not hold much ground.
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 material.
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 and Foremost, There
are
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 a bulk of
crowd
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 that are not computer literate.They are not capable of handling these gizmos. To be more specific, a person needs a good knowledge of operating gadgets and a vast study of
technology
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.
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, according to Google research,in 2020, there are only 34%
males
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of males
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 and 30%
females
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of females
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technology
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 literate which is very low as the majority of the population is illiterate.
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, there is a big segment of society which is extremely poor. They can't even think of purchasing these electronic devices.
Technology
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 education is beyond their reach. To exemplify, according to the world poverty clock in 2021, roughly 86-6 million of the population are living in poverty.
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,
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 are a bunch of folks living in
remote
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a remote
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 range which
have
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 not any link with the rest of the world
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, There is no electricity in
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 remote spaces. The utilization of electronic machinery is far away from their thinking.
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,
population
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the population
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 living in the
himalayan
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Himalayan
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 region and most fields of African countries are living with no
access
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 to electricity.so it is very hard to get in touch with other areas.
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 to
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, their government can't even provide a single personal computer to their schools.
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, purchasing gadgets for themselves is
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 to impossible for them.
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, Newspapers and books carry an Aesthetic sense with them.
This
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 gives a unique pleasure to the reader which we can't get from an e-book, e-paper, online editorials and blogs.
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,
moat
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most
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 public in
india
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India
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 like to read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 along with a cup of tea or coffee...
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, the blue screen of these gadgets may adversely affect the eye vision of the readers. Nowadays, children need spectacles in their early childhood.
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 situation is a result of the computer's bluescreen. which in long run could ruin their eye vision which we know is irreversible.
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 but not the least, the other major reason is distractions. To be more specific,
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access
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 to all educational materials require internet
access
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. Social media
access
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also
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 comes along with connection. There
is
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 stimulant notifications while reading informational stuff. These notifications may easily distract the students. To sum up, after discussion it is quite evident that stopping publishing the books, newspapers &magass tIs not a feasible idea.was it will deprive many people
from
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 studying
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