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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while other thinks that it is essential for the human kind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #universe
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Necessity
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of
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the
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space
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humanity is a very pressing dilemma nowadays for
people
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. Even if there is a desire of a
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's nature to discover new possibilities
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 the world, society is not able to spend money on unbeneficial science without any practical application.
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 spends more and more resources on researching
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space
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. Governments and billionaires
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 year spent more money on
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 exploration projects than
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 any other year of
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history. The number of
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space
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 flights has increased significantly.
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, usual
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 are passionate about ideas
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growth
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the growth
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 of the
space
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 industry.
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,
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's attitude to the development of new
NASA's
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 and
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 bases is positive and constantly increasing.
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, there is a demand and social interest for investments in the
space
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 industry. Simultaneously amount of money spent on the support of the poor classes has decreased. Less
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 can afford
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appropriate medical care.
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 the average cost of medical insurance has increased, while average incomes have not increased.
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, wages in the social-necessary areas stagnate at the same level for a few years, which conservates the development of the social care sector.
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 cannot live as comfortable as they have lived before the decade of
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rapid
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 growth. To sum up, there could be a passion
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human nature to explore the whole world around us, but we ought to return resources from galactic
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researching
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research
 to important needs of
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous expenditure
  • pressing issues
  • proportion
  • scientific discoveries
  • technological advancements
  • resource limitations
  • overpopulation
  • habitable planets
  • international cooperation
  • unifying endeavor
  • innovation
  • boost the economy
  • job creation
  • private sector investments
  • critics argue
  • benefits gained
  • space industry
  • potentially offer solutions
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