Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Famous actors, musicians and
sport
players are often rewarded with Change the noun form
sports
substantial
Add an article
a substantial
amount
of money. Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
Such
pays are hardly unaccessible for company workers, or even leaders, but is known to be the norm for pop stars
. Hence
, I strongly agree that such
entertainers
are unfairly rewarded with extreme high pays
, and Fix the agreement mistake
pay
also
stating out
how Change preposition
apply
instead
other forms of performers
including classical musicians and theatrical members should Correct your spelling
receive
recieve
higher pay.
Correct your spelling
receive
Stars
on the screen are frequently paid an enormous amount from
their achievement. Change preposition
for
Although
, it is no doubt that such
members had put in countless efforts to become successful, however
, such
dedication is seen no
Change preposition
as no
difference
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different
to
people working Change preposition
in
at
other professions too. Change preposition
in
For instance
, a worker dedicating its
time 8 hours a day throughout the week producing varieties of useful products Correct pronoun usage
their
his
her
to
the world would unlikely get even the slightest chance of earning the same amount as the Change preposition
for
stars
. Meanwhile, the norms of many stars
are to have their own private jet, indicating the extreme richness of screen entertainers
.
On the other hand
, I would suggest people working as part of classical musicians and theatrical performers
to
be paid more highly Fix the infinitive
apply
instead
. In the area of entertainment that are
not broadcasted by TV, the earnings are substantially lower, and only Change the verb form
is
few
of the best Change the article
a few
performers
are paid reasonably. This
unreasonable payment is a threat to the stage
performers
, as it looses
talented members to carry on with its performance as many move into Replace the word
loses
alernative
careers which provides Correct your spelling
alternative
stable
income. A prime example of Add an article
a stable
this
is many Japanese stage
performers
having to take a
Correct article usage
apply
Add a hyphen
part-time
part time
jobs in order to carry on Add a hyphen
part-time
its
career as Correct pronoun usage
their
performers
,
while having enough money for living.
In Remove the comma
apply
conclusions
, Fix the agreement mistake
conclusion
although
I absolutely agree that many entertainers
are paid excessively, this
is not the same for stage
entertainers
. Therefore
I suggest that stage
performers
should get a rise on their wadge in order for future shows to be maintained.Submitted by akichanskk on
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