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Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#demand #gas #oil #sources #areas #necessity #outweigh
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Nowadays there are a
lot
 of
students
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who continue
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continue
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continuing
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 their
study
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 outside their origin country.
Although
students
 will often struggle with cultural and linguistic challenges while abroad, they will
also
 gain significant life experiences that will reward them later on in their careers. In my opinion,
students
 who have experience
in
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 living in
others country
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other countries
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 will have more advantages than
students
 who never
going
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 to abroad for studying. The main advantage of studying abroad is that
students
 will learn a
lot
 of new things they never had before in life. They will learn
new
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 culture, new language, new atmosphere,
and
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etc. That will push
students
 to unleash their ability to adapt more quickly. Studying abroad
also
 push
students
 to leave their comfort zone to
the
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 new zone that can increase their ability. All of
this
 experience will give
students
 more knowledge and confidence for their
career
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 in the future. Despite
advantages
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the advantages
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, there are
also
 disadvantages
of
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to
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 studying abroad.
First
 of course in
term
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 of cost. Studying abroad spent
great
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a great
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 amount of cost. Most people had to prepare
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 budget in order to catch their dreams
in
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of
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 studying abroad. Even though they had prepared a
lot
 of budgets, sometimes they are struggling with
economical
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the economical
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condition
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conditions
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 because of unexpected needs while living in other countries.
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 all of
positives
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the positives
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 and negatives
side
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,
i
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 conclude that studying abroad has more beneficial for people. By studying abroad, people have a
lot
 of experiences that
impossible
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are impossible
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 for those who are not.
That
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 experiences bring
great
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a great
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 amount of beneficial impact
for
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 their career in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • fostering innovations
  • renewable energy sources
  • energy security
  • geopolitical tensions
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental risks
  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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