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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Instead
 of creating their own
food
 commodities, governments throughout the world are increasingly dependent on
food
 imported from other
countries
. It is, in my opinion, a dangerous trend that will have a detrimental influence on the agricultural sectors of
countries
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my thoughts in detail. The disadvantage of depending on imported commodities rather than indigenous goods is that all local farmers in the nation who rely on crop sales would see a significant drop, lowering their living conditions.
As a result
, agricultural workers may need to seek alternative employment opportunities.
Moreover
, during times of crisis, nations that import products on a large scale will stop doing so, causing other
countries
 that buy these items to suffer greatly.
Additionally
, imported
food
 is not necessarily nutritious. To preserve the
food
 while it is transported to other parts of the world, specific chemicals are added to it. These preservatives have been linked to the development of deadly illnesses
such
 as cancer.
In addition
, failing to maintain storage facilities results in significant
food
 waste.
Moreover
,
countries
 have to spend a huge amount
to
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 foreign
countries
 in trade, and imported
food
 is overpriced. It
also
 has a negative impact on the nations' native cultures. In Japan,
for example
, where imported meals are growing more popular, people's knowledge of their own indigenous cuisines is dwindling.
However
, in a way, it might
also
 be true that importing goods can provide access to some foods that would
otherwise
 be unavailable in certain
countries
. Preserved foods kept for extended periods,
on the other hand
, can induce a range of illnesses. To summarise, imports are not always beneficial, and they have a negative influence on the country's agriculture sector, weakening the country's economic position.
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