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Given is a line graph illustrating the rate of occupation in
caravan
parks
 and
hotel
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during
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Jun
 08 to Sep 09. In summary,
rate
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the rate
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 of
caravan
parks
 is higher than the rate of
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the hotel
a hotel
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hotel
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in
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every month, while both rates reached the minimum percentage
in
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on
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Jun
 09. Looking from
Jun
 08 to Dec 08,
Caravan
parks
 had around 54% occupancy
in
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Jun
 08, which was 15% higher than the proportion of hotels. In the following two months,
Caravan
parks
 remained stable at around 53%, while hotels increased steadily by 9% to around 49%. Looking from Mar 09 to Sep 09, the gap between
caravan
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 park and
hotel
 narrowed to only 5%, with
caravan
 park 55% and
hotel
 50%.
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Jun
 09, both
caravan
 park and
hotel
 declined to the lowest point at 52% and 39% respectively.
However
,
in
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 Sep 09, it rose back by 1% and 5% to 54% and 45% in turn.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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