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Do you think music and rhymes help young children in learning ?

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The importance of
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 and rhymes helps to increase the power of learning which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming
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increase concentration power . Since , children can learn
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 and children can prepare themselves better.
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 of
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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