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The given chart displays the percentages of population and households living under the poverty line in six Australian family types in 1999. Overall, the sole parents are the most significant proportion of the poverty family rate, while the greatest number of the poor population comprises
couples
 with
children
. It is clear from the table that sole parents and singles without
children
 make up the
first
 and the
second
 position in case of indigent family proportions at 21% and 19% respectively, with the total being 232.000 people and 359.000 people.
Couples
 with
children
,
couples
 without
children
, and single-aged persons occupy the following three positions of impoverished family rate. When
this
 falls between 6% and 12%, with
couples
 with
children
 at the top and single-aged persons at the bottom, the total penniless population in the former family stands out in the comparison.
This
 is recorded as high as 933.000. In the
last
 position stand aged
couples
, contributing 4% to the total impoverished household rate.
Moreover
, these
couples
also
 have the lowest number of impoverished household members, reaching just below 50.000 out of 1.837.000.
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