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Some people prefer to eat meals at restaurants, while others like to prepare and eat food in their own home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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I absolutely think that
last
 years have many options for eating like restaurants with wonderful interior design and good service.But
on the other hand
,cooking
the
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 meal at home is a good way for us.
To begin
 with,many people around the world have various ideas about
this
.Honestly, I prefer eating at
my
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home .I feel
this
 way for two reasons that I will explain in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,in my opinion, preparing something
for eating
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 by yourself,is healthier for your body especially if you follow
also
 the gym because in
this
 way you will have more energy for your exercises.By cooking in your kitchen you will be able to amount each ingredient that you are going to use.Meanwhile,the meat,the vegetables the cheeses,the fruits,the oil and everything else that are used by you are fresh and
this
 is very important.
Secondly
,all know that restaurants are incredibly expensive.
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,I
remembered
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 one day when I went out with my family to the beach for dinner and the bill that came was an average of 500 $,it was terrible.Honestly, we enjoyed that time there but it cost so much.If I had taken them to market and
prepare
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 really it
will
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 have gone lesser.To according
this
,I decided to cook more in-house and
to
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spend less. Anyway,in conclusion, personally,I believe that eating at
the
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home is healthier and it makes a lot more economics, in
this
 manner, you will save your money and your body.Maybe,once in a
while
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 it could be a nice choice but not every day.
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