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In some countries, people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Nowadays, a vast majority of people all over the world prefer renting houses rather than purchasing them.
Such
 a decision can depend on a person,
prices
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on
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 apartments and many other factors that influence the opinion of buyers. In my
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point
pont
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 of view,
lease
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the lease
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 on buildings can be much cheaper and
convenient
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 for those, who move a lot.
Nevertheless
, renting homes has some benefits and drawbacks at the same time. One of the main advantages of
lease
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the lease
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 on an apartment is its low price. There is no need to pay a great sum of money at once.
For example
, you can pay only once a month and any additional payments like mortgage rates are not required.
Moreover
, people who travel most of their time do not need
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permanent housing;
therefore
, it is much more comfortable for them to rent homes.
However
,
such
 a type of living has some disadvantages that can be rather significant for some tenants.
For instance
, some facilities or furniture may be in an inappropriate condition. Sometimes it can become a remarkable drawback since for most people
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 and a great appearance of their houses are extremely essential.
Furthermore
, a landlord may turn out to be a person, who disturbs the tenants and interferes with their lives. To sum up,
lease
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the lease
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 on homes is a perfect idea for
travelers
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 and those, who do not have a high income.
Nonetheless
, there are several drawbacks
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this
 kind of living and not everyone is ready to put up with them.
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