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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

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It is shown in the graph a planning construction of a museum in 1998 and how it was changed in 2008. It is clear,
as
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that as
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 new services for the museum´s
clients
 have appeared, new stores have been built.
In addition
, the exhibition hasn't been eliminated
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which
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wich
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which
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 is the
important
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most important
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 room
of
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on
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 the stage. Before
in
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apply
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1998
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,1998
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 the garden place hadn't
have
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had
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 a
harmony
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harmonious
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 garden
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which
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wich
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which
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 is essential for attraction of
clients
. Now, there are on it there is a
caffe
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cafe
 sitting area, gardens and fountains.
Additionally
, in the past
map
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,map
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 there was not a restaurant, so in the new
museum
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,museum
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 the designer
abilitad
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ability
 a new one. As
a
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the
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last
 point, the bathrooms, shop and bags and coats rooms were moved to the left area aim to have more mobility for the
clients
.
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, the antique museum had the WC far away from the services. Now
clients
 feel much blissful having more areas to visit and having much time appreciating the
echibitions
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exhibitions
exhibition
.
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