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These days people are using the Internet for shopping, work and to communicate with others without the need for face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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In today's world the usage of the internet has been increasing in our present life we use the internet for many things starting for work to buying food or groceries etc. we got so much attached to the internet it changed our life in a way that we didn't even expect
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 change had merits and demerits. In
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 I'll be talking about the advantages and disadvantages of
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 revolutionary change. To start there are many many disadvantages to the network world.
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 people started to reduce contacting others face to face after
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 pandemic most of the meeting are been done through zoom and google meets which mean that travelling from one place to another has reduced. The
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 point is there has been increasing in the number of health issues
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 the walking and running have been reduced due to no movement since all the work is been done at the home due to
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 people got more obesity problems. The final point is reduced communication skills due to the pandemic pupils have been at the home and doing work from home because there was very less number of meeting and group works so the leadership and communication skills have reduced.
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 there have been some benefits for students because of a pandemic the colleges and schools have been conducted through virtual mode and due to
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 the class times became more flexible than before
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 students were able to do part-time jobs as an intern and learn more skills of real-world and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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