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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people think that it is a good speed forward, while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays ,the taste of the society has moved to read e-
books
instead
 of paper-
books
 ,
however
, many still try to keep old
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fashion
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books
 , both groups have pros and cons ,
however
 , I think the side of using electronic
books
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 side, so , I am going to explain my experiences to clarify
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because I am motivated by the smell of the paper for having a long study time ,
in addition
 ,when I am leafing the book
this
 sound has made me relaxed ,alongside , these are more suitable to write a note on the corners,
however
, I have experienced that I need to
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 house for creating my own book collection ,
in addition
 ,it is so difficult moving big libraries from house to house , while, each person can have unlimited
books
 in a small memory device and reach to
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. E-
books
 are more adaptive with the planet because
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 these are not needed
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 trees as abasic material , but,
this
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the
human'
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 eyes because the blue light of electronic devices
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 a cause of dryness in the cornea and the root of the
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majority of headaches. In the end, people must replace old
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usage of
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paper
books
 with new electronic
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 and learn more about working with
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electronic devices to build their own libraries,because
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, electronic
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small spaces ,
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scientist
scientis
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scientists
 must find a solution to limit the damages of reading in the electronic devices for the human.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital revolution
  • sustainability
  • e-reader
  • digital rights management (DRM)
  • nostalgia
  • tangible
  • bibliophile
  • innovation
  • disruptive technology
  • screen fatigue
  • monetization
  • brick-and-mortar
  • obsolescence
  • cloud storage
  • multimedia features
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