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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today ‘s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In the modern world, the importance of
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 and
technology
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 has become increasingly important.
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 information
technology
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 and
science
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 subjects are popular among many
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, some feel that
history
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 should be the most important school subject. In
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 as well as for the world to move forward. On the one hand, It is important for all the
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 to have a certain level of knowledge about world
history
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 as well as their country.
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 helps us to learn the values, behaviours and cultural habits which have been coming from generation to generation.
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 eventually helps us on how we should behave in different societies.
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, the past helps us to know how ancient people used different methods in order to get the best out of the natural resources,
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 looking at the drawings in Sigiriya rock, shows that in the
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 people managed to create more than 20 different colours by using natural resources.
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, the geographical advantages,
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 how ancient people used the lands in order to generate an income and the locations they used to do business transactions.
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,
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 and information
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 help us to move along with the rapidly changing environment. It provides us with new discoveries,
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 on how to fight against new viral diseases, how to increase productivity to meet the rising demands, how to defend systems against hackers and how to use
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 to reduce environmental pollution.
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, without the basic knowledge of
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 subjects,
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 could not be able to contribute to society in a significant way. To conclude, the essay discussed, how
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 and
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 help us to find new findings and to fight against potential threats we could face in the future whereas
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 gives limited information on how to overcome
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 issues. In my opinion, even though
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 does help
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 to gain knowledge about how humans behaved and what they did, studying
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 and
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 helps
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 keep a step forward in
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of identity
  • cultural heritage
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • informed citizenship
  • societal issues
  • modern economies
  • climate change
  • healthcare
  • innovation
  • job creation
  • competitive advantage
  • global market
  • problem-solving skills
  • logical reasoning
  • technological literacy
  • digital age
  • technical skills
  • digital competence
  • active participation
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