You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company to which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem with the equipment -explain how this problem is affecting your work -say what to want the shop or the company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the product of your company which I purchased from the online shop. I have recently ordered the Dell notebook 123 from eBay. Unfortunately, when I was taking off the packaging, it has some fractures on the monitor that makes me unable to work. In the meantime, I am quite very busy ,

therefore

, I am a teacher that I have to do an online class. My old notebook was used often and almost every day

that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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cause

Correct word choice

because

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I decided to buy a new one for the stronger potential to work. Suddenly, when I got a new

then

my old one has broken down, so I change to the new one but it

also

unable to work. I am so disappointed with your product.

However

, in my ,opinion I do not think

this

mistake was from your absolutely it probably was from the delivery time. Anyways, I would like you to be responsible for

this

situation. I,

therefore

, suggest that you replace the item, or I will be given a full refund, as a warranty covers it. Thanks in advance for your matter attention, and I would like to ensure that

this

problem does not happen in the future. Sincerely your Pair

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

212 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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