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The line graph depicts the information about the
land
 which is used for organic agriculture between two nations between 1985 and 2010. The graphs
further
 collate that in the beginning 25 thousand hectares of
land
 which used for organic food in both countries, while in the country A slight increment was seen in 1990.
In contrast
, the
use
 of
land
 increased dramatically and reached a peak of around 290000 hectares till 2000, whereas the
use
 slightly decrease in the
year
 2005.
Finally
, a huge drop was
also
 seen which decrease the uses of the
land
 to 150000-hectare lands at the end of 2010.
Moreover
, In country B the
use
 started with 25000 hectares and
then
 increased to 60000 in 1990, whilst again a sharp curve was
also
 seen and reached 160000 in the
year
 1995.
Furthermore
, in the
year
 2000 little
use
also
 increased
then
 achieved 190000.
However
, the
uses
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use
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 started to decrease between 2000 to 2010 which
finally
 dropped to 150000. Overall, both countries started from the same size of
land
 in the former
year
 and after various ups and downs reached
at
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a
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point
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a point
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 where little difference was seen in their uses in the latter
year
.
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