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several languages are in danger of extinct because they are spoken by very small number of people. some people say tgat governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe taht would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#languages #danger #people #tgat #governments #money #taht #waste
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 are disappearing because people prefer to communicate in
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international
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. One camp claims that the government ought to spend money and save the future of endangered
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. At the same
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 critics said it is nothing less than the wastage of public money. In
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 I will discuss both views and give my opinion at the end. One section of the society holds
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 perception that the government be supposed to shell out bucks and save local
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 because every
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 has its own importance and it
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global diversity. If mother tongues get obsolete
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 it would cast adverse effects on the culture and uniqueness of the particular group. So
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 why the government has to open up local
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 schools and inclined the people
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 mother tongue. On the flip side,
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 ideology is at loggerheads with
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, that all efforts to protect the dead
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 are futile. If we have some popular and international
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 to communicate
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 money and energy must spend to promote
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languages
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 rather than saving local
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, communication is the prime purpose of
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 and it would be immensely handy if all mankind prefer one
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language
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 would not be a barrier. In my opinion in
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 era of globalisation
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 go
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 global rather than local. Dead
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 like Latin Sanskrit have little importance,
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 we have
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 technology to convert and understand the dead
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 literature. To conclude. Change is a constant, so with time local
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 are going to vanish and global
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 are getting
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