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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#diet #meals #life
A good
diet
 is the key
of
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 success that
help
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 us to keep and good soul. In every ,masses soul food plays a significant role.For keeping good well-being, food is not only the source others sources must be important.I agree with
this
 statement to some large extent and I will discuss the reasons in upcoming paragraphs. For leaving good growth fitness is must significant.
Good
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diet
 or meal take
any
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 effect on well-being. It
reduce
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 the level of disease.
i
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 mean to say that if
healthy
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a healthy
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 and good meal is followed we
doesn't
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 out of short in whole life.
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,if we
not
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do not
did not
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 care about our
diet
than
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then
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 our health is worsening day by day.
Hence
good
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a good
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diet
 provides more energy which helps to do the work. ,
Moreover
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 it helps restore our body a fresh in a better and purpose fully manner.
Only
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balanced
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a balanced
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diet
 is not the key to
healthy
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a healthy
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 life.some other sources which help to make healthy
diet
 .it must be important which is exercise.To explain it, if we take only a healthy
diet
 and no use of any other activities so we can't make a healthy and strong body
also
 can't live a successful life without any
hurrdle
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hurdle
hurdles
.
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,if we can do any work only eating
healthy
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diet
 so we can' ameliorate health.
Thus
, To sum up,food and water is the source that helps to keep stay on earth so
it
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 must be important. According
to
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,
me
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 I favour the former statement
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