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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
From the past to today, especially the
last
 three decades have witnessed negative cases,
such
 as the over pollution in lakes or terrestrials. One of the most remarkable reasons is human-induced waste and the highest share of these pollutants belongs to materials based on plastic.
In addition
 to the plastic residues, another polluting factor is chemical products
such
 as detergents. To
be deteriorated
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 the ecological balance of these highly-harmful determinants is a consequence of increasing the general consumption trends in many areas
such
 as textile, transportation vehicles which need fossil fuels and others. According to the scientifical study which it is conducted by Toronto University, greenhouse gases and wastes which they are released in the processing of production have reached double-folds in comparison to 30 years before.
However
, another significant cause is the population which continues to rise almost every year around the world. In spite of all these facts mentioned above, many actions, that they will be taken by governments exist as well. One of these implementations is to be organized various campaigns in order to build public awareness. In
this
 way, ecological lesson contents can be scheduled.
On the other hand
, it can be provided with a strict policy approach which is well-structured and
legal
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 regulations. To sum up, it is an undeniable fact
the
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 environmental erosion exists. With
the
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supportive regulations in the field of policy and
useful
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 practices, it can be avoided from
this
 rapid pollution.
Otherwise
, in long run, a serious environmental disaster will hit the world by leaving permanent damages behind.
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