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several languages are in danger of extinct because they are spoken by very small number of people. some people say tgat governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe taht would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#languages #danger #people #tgat #governments #money #taht #waste
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languages
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languages
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people
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adminstration
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administration
 should spend
money
 to stay alive meanwhile others
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argue
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argue
 that would be
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 of
money
. Both these aspects will be discussed with relevant
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 and examples. On the one hand, advancement in
people
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 in teenagers influenced to famous
languages
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tongue
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 wants to look
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modern
for instance
 today most of the countries speak English either in communication and
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 as well as in their native places.
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, governments could provide teaching centres in individual society and encourage citizens towards learning native tongue
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results
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 to adopt new
languages
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, many believe that spending
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waste
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wasted
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. There are two
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main
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, most
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people
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 have opted and speak
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language
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 as
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 English and
also
 utilise these in their workplace and at home because, today's youth
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belive
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this
 kind of
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contact
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.
Secondly
,
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organizations
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 need their employees to speak
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language
 which helps
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 of companies.
Although
, if
admistration
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administration
 spend
money
 for
languages
 as a consequence to poor results. In conclusion, in my perspective
people
 should use their native
language
 compare to other because it keeps their mother
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tongue
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tongue
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, if
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 of
languages
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