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Today food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people believing that farmers are growing
food
various
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framing
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farming
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 area
then
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and then
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 they export
food
in
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all over
world
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. So,
this
are
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 more benefits than drawbacks. To commence with, there are
a
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numbers
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 of positive reasons why
food
 travels in the world.
First
 and forest,in the
globel
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global
 which lands are mostly growing
food
.
Afterthat
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 they
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food
 to
another nations
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 because different
country
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growing
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 different
food
. To elaborate, transport is
main
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 role of foods import and export that time many individuals
chance
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 to work through the
food
 travels.
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, a survey
was
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conducted
conduted
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conducted
 by
department
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 of education in the USA revealed that
the
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india
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 is
maximum
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food
 import to
another countries
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another country
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.
Thus
, they earn a lot of money when they send to
another countries
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.
On the other hand
, some pupils say that when foods travel
huge
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 distance
then
 the rate
increased
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 because all assets on the
food
 and customer have to give taxes on
import
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food
.
In addition
, some
food
 need to keep in cold
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temperature
temperatures
tempreture
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temperature
 and dry area
as well as
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, as well as this type food,
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this
 type
food
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of food
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 is too expensive so
these
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food
 do not buy every person.
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, the headlines of tribune
newspapper
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newspaper
 showed that kiwi is national fruits of New Zealand while when they export to
another countries
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then
 its rate increased. To capitulate, at the present every person
prefer
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 to eat
food
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different
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with differnet
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differnet
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different
 tastes so they can buy easily in their local market.while they
not
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do not
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 eat
food
 that
travel
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 from long distance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global supply chain
  • import/export
  • agricultural technology
  • logistics systems
  • consumer preferences
  • exotic foods
  • climate variation
  • seasonal availability
  • food security
  • natural disasters
  • economic benefits
  • developing nations
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