It’s important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

One important stage in a
child
's growth is certainly the development of a conscience, which is linked to the ability to make difference between right and wrong. It is generally believed that
punishment
can help them to learn
this
distinction.
However
, it seems to me that
punishment
does not have much of
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to play in
this
.
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of all the question depends on the age of
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.To punish a very young
child
is both wrong and senseless as an infant will not understand what is
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occurring
occuring
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or why he or she is being punished.
Punishment
can create some
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psychological
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problems in the later years of the
child
. Most
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that some criminal and cruel people were
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exposed
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exposed
to violence and
punishment
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early
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. When even they did not understand what
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doing and why they were being punished.
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of
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of people always say
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if we know
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of
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punishment
before getting
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we can change our behaviours and we
also
can pay
much
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attention to
this
problem.
However
, a
child
can be rewarded for good behaviour and it can help them to be
discourged
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discouraged
from bad.
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kind of approach will
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more than harsh punishments, which might entail many negative consequences. It is true that
punishment
causes some negative results but after that , if sanctions are needed the
punishment
should not be of a physical nature, as that just sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people.
Punishment
should not be in any cruel way.
Finally
, children try to
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imitate
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their parents for
this
reason parents have to be
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role
model
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for
this children
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with their good attitudes. In conclusion,
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of
punishment
depends on the age
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child
and
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mistake
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but if it is needed
then
it is should not be
of
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a physical basis it can contain little messages but it is not acceptable
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cruel
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way.
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