It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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between falses and truths. Take a child who is playing games more than average magnitude as an example; here one's parents play an active role and they place some
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about by overplaying. In my view, the
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their self conscientious
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and lose their sense of satisfaction.
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, parents and teachers should be excluded from
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and try to learn them by informative methods
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as explaining the sides,
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some games to show them the rights and wrongs, assign puzzles to solve them. To sum up,
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as well as practical and not
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be physical so as to show its impact effectively.
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cause a sense of contentment in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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