Some argue younger people are not suitable for important positions in the government, while others think this is a good idea. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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are arguing that about young
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are applicable for main places in the government or not.It is often a subject of debate whether who is the best person to get the place.The following essay will explore the topic from both perspectives and justify why
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are arguing about that.
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, young
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have more ideas and creative stills than senior
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skilled in using technology and they
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can find a comfortable way to help their work. The pros of young
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are powerful, energetic,
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expert in technology and etc... The thinking of young men
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, while they can surprise us all the time. Some
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think young
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are not suitable for important positions in the government. There are some problems young
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might have.
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, their communicative ability
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not as well as senior
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, they are not stable enough, some
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young
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are conceited, and more problems. In fact, we have an increasing number of young
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who want to get
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in the government which was cutthroat.
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, I think they can do well with their job
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if their ability is recognized by everyone. They can use their strong point
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • far-reaching consequences
  • life and professional experience
  • judicious policymaking
  • fresh perspectives
  • stagnant systems
  • progressive and inclusive policies
  • political acumen
  • ineffective governance
  • demographic
  • long-term planning
  • authoritative presence
  • manipulation
  • seasoned politicians
  • adaptable
  • open-minded
  • flexibility in problem-solving
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