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Nowadays it is possibe to use computers and moblie phones for automatic language translation, and there is no need for human translators and interpreters. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the joyfulness valuation for married and unmarried persons in the US and their juveniles affecting the
happiness
 ratings of married couples. At
first
 glance, the 18-29 age group has the most proportion of
happiness
 ratings with 45%. While people aged between 30 to 40 and over 65 are approximately the same as those aged 18-29 at 44%. The least percentage of ratings is the adults aged 50-64 with 40%.
In contrast
, unmarried couples have lower
happiness
 than married at under 35%. The youngest and older people both have the least percentage at 21&. Plus, the 30-49 age group is slightly higher with 22%.
In addition
, married couples having kids is happier than others. According to the chart, the
happiness
 of having children aged under 18 is highest at 44%, but it decreases by 3% when the children are upper 18 and 1% for whom people do not have kids. In general, it is admitted that married persons' life has more joyfulness than others and the effect of children on
happiness
 rating is higher than we think.
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