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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 is one of the most crucial factors in part of people’s life. If a question about should we
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 for the same company is addressed, it will be challenging to reach our decision for
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 argument. I will analyze both views and give my opinion with relevant examples. Some people believe that working for the same job all their working life could make them be professional in their duties. They can improve their skills which they already better knew how it works, processes, and how to solve problems.
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, an examiner for English writing using their
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 experience in the same job can easily notice where errors of writing could appear in the essay.
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, others think that they need a wide range of experience which they have to
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 for different organizations. That causes people to have various experiences.
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, those who always change their
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 have different duties and environments. They will learn what they have to do based on desiring of each company and it is a reason that they will have an individual value of experience. In my opinion, I prefer to
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 for the same company because I don’t want to lose my relationship with my colleagues. I don’t like to make new friends in new organizations. It is exhausting and boring. Currently,
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, I have colleagues that are close. We helped each other when we have problems, which is worth it for me. In conclusion, whether you change an organization or not depends on what is your purpose, if you need to have a variety of experiences it is appropriate to
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 for different ones, but if you want to improve your skill to be an expert it is acceptable to
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 for the same ones.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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