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The picture below show the changes of a park from 1980 to now.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The map illustrates, how a garden transformed between 1980 and the present.In 1980 the garden was divided into two parts.
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 park changed into four different areas now. Overall, it can be seen that
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since 1980
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 place has undergone many changes till now .
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, the playground is surrounded by all walls on four sides these two gates were connected by l shaped the pound was situated in the northeast ,which was enclosed by the benches on the south-east corner.Southwest there were some trees .
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 the flowers on the southeast edge have been transformed by a playground while the flowers on the south-west intersection are replaced by bushes ,and
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 the trees lying on the northeast rim have been replaced with picnic chairs desks barbecue but the pound which is enclosed by the benches it is situated at the se place,and remove l shapes road .now the place is open from all side
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