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Team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are played alone. Do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills #life
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Team
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activities
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 would be a better option for acquiring important
life
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skills
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 rather than individual
activities
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. I personally neither agree nor disagree with
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 because both
activities
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 can provide great opportunities for
people
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 to develop each solitary or group
skills
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 which are helpful for living.
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,
solo
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activities
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 are a good option to improve personal
skills
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such
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 as concentration and planning how to overcome problems and difficulties alone. through
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activities
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people
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 can learn how they can improve their concentration and planning
abilities
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.
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, chees, would be a perfect individual sport
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 every person can learn how to focus and trust
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their own
abilities
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 while thinking about the
next
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 step. These
activities
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 can easily improve confidence and individuals who play
solo
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activities
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 have a better chance to confront and overcome
life
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 problems because they have improved their self-confidence; they are aware of the role of planning and trusting in
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 own
abilities
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.
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, some believe that
team
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activities
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 play a more important role in
life
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.
first
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 of all, the
people
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 who are cooperating as a
team
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 would more likely to be open-minded and have better communication
skills
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. these
skills
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 are more important for employees as well because workers have the lowest difficulty cooperating with others and can adapt to the
work
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 condition faster than anyone else; so, these
people
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 have a better chance to be recruited by companies as well.
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, when it comes to working as a
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, each person can learn that they have to trust each member’s
abilities
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; they have to replace their personal desires with a unit mindset which is more efficient for the
team
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.
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, the new startups with a unit mindset have a better chance to reach the success because all the workers have no trusting issue and all individual can
work
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 as one. So, each member boosts others'
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, and the whole company can succeed. In conclusion, both
activities
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 seem to be significant for living. individuals can learn how to deal with problems when facing a challenge, and
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 develop their self-confidence and concentration
skills
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 through
solo
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activities
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. And by
team
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activities
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, improving communication
skills
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 and being a sympathetic person would be easier and more helpful for
life
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 and
work
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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