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A person's health is their own responsibility rather than the government's responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 era, a healthy lifestyle for an individual becomes very tough, and many believe that an individual is responsible for their fitness and it's not the responsibility of the
government
 to keep their citizens healthy .
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and I think that because of some
government
 jobs
people
 are not giving enough
time
 to their
health
, whereas a healthy
citizen
 can
also
 help to improve the economy.
Firstly
, these days
government
 jobs are becoming more and more hectic and because of that a
person
 doesn't have any
time
 for his
health
 or any physical activity,
however
, it may cause obesity and other heart diseases, because of lack of
time
 an individual is
also
 eating unhealthy fast food to save some
time
,
for example
, In Mumbai, majority of
people
 eat street food in their lunch to save some
time
 and money. These bad-eating habits are very harmful, and
government
 should reduce some working hours of an employee.
Secondly
, a healthy
citizen
 is always a happy
citizen
, if a
government
 will concentrate on the
health
 of its
people
, these
people
 may help the
government
 in the economy of the country. Research has shown that a healthy
person
 is more organised and punctual as compared to an unhealthy
person
, a healthy employee will work more efficiently in their office and
this
 will generate more revenue for the
government
, and help a nation for their economy. If the
government
 will reduce working hours and propagate the importance of healthy living, a
citizen
 will become more motivated toward their
health
 and use their leisure
time
 for some physical activity and healthy eating. To conclude, living a healthy life is not only a responsibility of an individual but, it's
also
 a responsibility of the
government
 as well, and I recommend that
government
 should reduce working hours so that a
person
 could dedicate some
time
 to his
health
.
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