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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is asserted by some
people
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 that the
students
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 of institutions study subjects which they are interested in.
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, some individuals
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 that they should just educate in fields which are practical in
future
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. Both sides present logical arguments which will be elucidated followed by my own take on the matter. On the one hand, studying whatever they enjoy
it
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takes priority in some
people
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's opinion. The
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 compelling reason is that person's employability.
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, when
students
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 accomplish their tasks out of interest in their subjects they can be widely successful and have impressive results.
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 in turn paves the way for upcoming opportunities to have a job in their favourite major. An example of the situation is
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kindness
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 and energetic nurse who has chosen
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 major at university because she enjoys it.Thereby, she
fulfills
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 her rules in the best and correct way.
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,a sense of
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 and self-conscientious are
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importance
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. To put it another way, when the pupils love what they study, they fill with
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 of contentment,
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also
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cause
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 an intense rise in one's self-reliance.
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, others advocate the idea of studying what is useful for their
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.
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 with, more chances of employment
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can have in the
future
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.Under
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 circumstance the
students
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 not only have
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no
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 difficulties financial but
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they
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can accommodate the cost of living effortlessly.Take a doctor,who
not
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 interested in
hospital
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a hospital
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 as an example;his material possession is more
what
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than
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 they think.
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 person would no longer have problems with
make
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 a living.
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,
society
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 demand is of importance.Simply put, some fields are vacancy as well as the country needs professional
people
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 for them.
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, by educating these practical subjects they can eliminate these requirements. To conclude, I would tend to side with those
support
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who support
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students
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studying
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study
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 whatever they
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are interest
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interest
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interested
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 in. It seems because of financial problems and community needs, some
people
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 choose to educate what is needed for
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future
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the future
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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