Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters hat affect them. Discuss both and give your own opinion.

One of the most
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trends of today's world is
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upsurge in the number of people believing that
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allow
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their
children
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choices
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about
matters.
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. I personally both side with
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to make
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choices
.
First
and foremost,some
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family
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family
members. To elaborate, when they live alone at home and
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because their
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and they have no
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children
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time
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to
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make their own
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daily routine.
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conducted by the department of education in the USA revealed that more than 45
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live without
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they have to make
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because
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they do not talk with another person.
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negative effect on their life. As well as they have no experience
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buying and making. To explicate it, when they take
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decision
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wrong
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societies
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societies
as they try to take drugs.
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take drugs because they have
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choices
. To capitulate,
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government
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should give
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on
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limit matters for
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decision
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then
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lifestyle and well learning about
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matters.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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