It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach behaviour to children?

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Some people believe that children should be punished
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to teach them the difference between
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good and
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bad behaviour. I vehemently disagree
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opinion for the reasons that I will outline in
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recommend modern ways
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teaching their
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discipline.
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, children are too young to be aware of their mistakes at
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stage of their lives, so punishing them physically will not help them to learn morals and ideals.
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the contrary, it could lead them to be more stubborn and insist on behaving badly.
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, young people can possibly be violent when they grow up
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of beating them every time, they make a mistake.
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, parents should not resort to physical punishment. There are so many ways that can help children discern between good and bad
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, parents and educators can ask a child to go to the grounding corner and they are not allowed to talk or play in
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corner to make them understand that they behaved badly. Fathers and mothers should enable their
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to recognize their mistakes by asking
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bear the consequences of their actions.
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, if a child breaks the doll of their siblings, they should not be given allowances or they should bring them a new toy. Following
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strategy will lead
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to be more responsible and bear the consequences of their actions. In Summary, many educators believe that punishment is the only way of teaching
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right and wrong actions. I believe that
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is not
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way of bringing up young people. I believe that resorting to modern methods has more fruitful results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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