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Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local customs and behaviour. Some pople disagree, they think the host country should welcome cultural differenecs. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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importance of local
customs
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 in a
country
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 is always debatable and becomes more major issue nowadays with some
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 claiming that a visitor of other countries must emulate the local
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 and others reject
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 notion by accepting the other
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's differences
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, I am examining
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 question from both points of view and
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 explaining why I believe in
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 disagreement some
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 argue that the imitation of local
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 of a
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 should be implemented on the
people
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 who visit which is considered
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 its drawback. The main reason for accepting is to understand their cultural values and the history of their existence .culteral values
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 as the traditional way of living and ritual importance. It explains that the tradition of a
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 is more valued by wearing customary clothes and ornaments. It shows the viewer how the
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 about their culture
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, others believe that the host
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 should accept its cultural differences and respect each other. It is often argued that a citizen of a nation should respect and accept the identity and cultural beliefs
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who came
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country
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 .
people
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 often have
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 opinion because they think that it can cause racial discrimination and ill-treatment of the visitors because
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who
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 in other parts of the world have
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their
 own views and culture
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that
 they practise in various
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circumstances
 but if they visited
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another
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 and imitate the
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 unknowingly of that nation can hurt
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their
 own lifestyle and beliefs In my opinion,the latter argument is more rational because
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different
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different
people
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 world have
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different
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different
 virtues and that must be
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respected
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respected
 to recapitulate , according to the argument for mentioned above one can reach to the conclusion the
people
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 of a nation must accept other
people
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 of another
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 to respect and welcome
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their
 cultural
diffrences
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differences

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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