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international sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? give specific example.

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Nowadays, international
events
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 have been an enjoyable activity for our society.
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, when it comes to hosting
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 event. People believe that it can lead to negative
outcomes
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 for the hosting country.
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 , In
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 essay, I will argue that hosting
events
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 can have a wide range of benefits
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 of issues. In the past, society used to have multiple fights
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 attending activities in other
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 .
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,
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 has resulted
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 country leaders being afraid of managing it, so governments started to develop new effective guidelines for hosting impactful
events
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 it took some time for
countries
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 to start applying the new standards, that led to positive
outcomes
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 for the public, which has affected our society in a greater way in terms of emotional state. Currently,
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 having effective guidelines,
countries
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 can host international activities and now it led to positive
outcomes
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 .
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,
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 has brought up a variety of cultures.
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, it has developed a stronger connection with people in these
events
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 .
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 , managing activities will make employees gain experience and have effective use of it for their career path. And, there is a wide profit margin that can be beneficial to the governments. In conclusion, In the past,
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 was a serious issue
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 the lack of resources and guidelines which has resulted in negative
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, so leaders avoided publishing
events
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 for that reason.
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,
countries
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 moved on from
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 obstacle to greater results. I believe managing
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 type of activity is an impactful experience for the country's future.
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