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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain individuals believe that it is favourable to have colleagues who are agreeing with you
for
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 many decisions while some
people
 argue that it is beneficial to be friend with individuals who argues for your point. I totally agree with the fact that it is required to have
people
 who
agrees
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 with you.
Firstly
, the essay will explain how the outputs are effective by maintaining
friends
 comprise similar thoughts and
secondly
, it will explain the issues that can be
arosed
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aroused
raised
 with arguments.
To begin
 with,
people
 can make
wonders
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 if they are living around a set of
people
 who poses similar attitudes. It is true that there are differences in behaviour and background of the
people
 that we met during our daily operations but it is possible to find
friends
 who are maintaining equal opinions.
Although
 we are engaged in hectic tasks in our day-to-day life, those can be easily
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acheived
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achieved
 if positive thoughts are given by
the
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 colleagues at work.
For example
, the Sri Lankan cricket
team
 could win the Australian series in a promising manner since the current
team
 members are working with the same mindset.
On the other hand
, continuous problems are caused
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 disagreements. When you are choosing your
friends
, it is required to find
people
 with equal thoughts.
Otherwise
, the relationship can be breached at any time due to an argument making both the parties apart forever.
Moreover
, there can be situations where colleagues
required
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 to work together though there are arguments between them. In
such
 instances, the outcome will not be
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achieved
acheived
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achieved
 because it will generate issues always.
For instance
, there was a
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team mate
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 who is having different ideas than me.
Hence
, there are so many discussions happening before taking a decision wasting the time of all the
team
 members. In conclusion, I agree with the fact that
people
 should be closer with
friends
 who are having similarities in their ideas to
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achieve
acheive
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 effective outputs whereas it will be difficult to gain success with an individual who consists
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 a different opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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