Digital Communication Technology, such as emails, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for you answer and include examples.

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Nowadays, with the advancement of
the
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technology
digital communication is not a novel experience
to
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everyone. Each and every person in the world have at least a bit
knowledge
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of knowledge
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of using them. As
this
technology
is globally spread, it helps to connect people together
especially
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through emails, messaging and social media. All over
this
essay, I am going to express my opinion regarding
this
technology
.
Firstly
, I must admit that there are various pros and cons of modern
technology
.
However
, when considering the advantages, it is hugely
benefited
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, if we want to send a message to someone. In past decades, man has to write and post
the
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letters.
This
takes more than three to five days to receive it
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the relevant person. But, at
present
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we can sit in front of the laptop or mobile phone and it
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just a few seconds to send
email
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an email
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or any other text message.
Also
,
this
is much beneficial for people in foreign countries because
,
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they can get
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video
radio
vedio
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video
calls to their family members and talk lively.
Moreover
, at workplaces these digital communication become more prominent as foreign conferences and sending work-related documents
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been much easier through
this
telecommunication method.
Furthermore
, it is cheaper and more profitable for the companies rather than migrating to countries for the meetings.
On the other hand
, there are drawbacks too.
Additionally
, to use these new technological aspects, we have to provide our personal information. So hackers can sometimes hack our private details and use them for an illegal
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.
That is
the main and dangerous disadvantage according to my knowledge. Not only that but
also
, the young generation can get addicted to social media and mislead their future as they are getting away with their education. Modern
technology
is like a coin. It has two sides, but to move with the future world, we have to admit the benefits without stepping
backwards
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and thinking about their negative aspects. In conclusion, I think it is a good impact that humans tend to use the latest advanced
technology
to improve connections and bonds.
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