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Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which do you prefer - planning or not planning for your leisure time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays
people
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 have so many things to do that they almost always do not have enough
time
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 for it. When we go to bed we carefully think and plan our
next
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 day, and it continues day in and day out. We wake up, recollect our checklist with things to do and in a few
minutes
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,minutes
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 we are already in a car on our
way
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 to the office. Often
people
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 do not have
time
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 for themselves. So, when
people
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 have some spare
time
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 they want to use it wisely. Some
people
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 prefer to plan activities for their free
time
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 very carefully.
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, others prefer not to make any
plans
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. In
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essay
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 I will analyze both cases and present my view in
favor
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favour
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 of planning free-
time
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 activities.
From
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On
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 the
one
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 side, not making any
plans
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 and just letting the
time
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 pass by for some
time
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 have some benefits.
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 of all, a person can just relax, enjoy the beautiful moments, spend his or her
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 with loved ones, watch a movie, listen to relaxing music, observe the flowers in bloom from the window, contemplate
about
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apply
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his or her life and just slow down the pace of life. I think it is a very good
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 to eliminate
one
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's stress and tension and just leave all troubles and worries behind.
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 the other side, careful planning can bring many benefits too.
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 of all,
one
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 can travel.
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 requires some planning to be made.
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,
one
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 most likely will need a hotel room. So, the reservation should be made beforehand.
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, it is wise to check
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's car to avoid breakdowns and have an uninterrupted worry-free trip.
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 of all, planning
one
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's activities allows
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one to
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to spend
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spending
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one
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's free
time
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 the
way
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 he/she likes.
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, if I want to play tennis
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this
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 incoming weekend I will certainly make a reservation for a court because in
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 case I will not be disappointed with the waste of my
time
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. Personally, I prefer to make
plans
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 for my free
time
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 because it allows me to spend my vacation or weekend the
way
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 I want it. To sum up, I think careful planning allows
people
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 to derive maximum benefits from their free
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.
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, I must sometimes confess,
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 I allow myself just to stay at home with my friends and family and not make any
plans
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.
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