The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

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The bar charts illustrate information about four various destinations of grad and post alumna admission of the UK after completing their college in the year 2008 .those who started full-time education.

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it is clearly evident both UK alum and postgraduate admission had a similar destination after leaving college as the figures show the majority went for

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study and the least figure of them chorused for voluntary

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. It is obvious that about 17735 graduate students opted for part-time work which is only 1500 people more than the sum of unemployed

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statistic of unemployment doctor about 16235 students .

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the total of postgraduates who went on to part-time work and

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study are close to each other with a difference of 190 people on the figures were 2535 and 2275 respectively. It is observed that nearly 3500 UK doctors opted for voluntary work which is in a similar proportion to the postgraduates where 345 chose the same ,

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it is seen in the case of future study that the sum of alum is 29665 which is the highest statistic in the table ,

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about 1625 postgraduates were unemployed that which was very lower than graduates unemployment.

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4 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people believe that children should spend all of their fee time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments both sides, and say which side you personally support.

Some prents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their children's studies. And, those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion on this?