some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born what might be the reasons for this ? What are the advantages and disadvantages ?

History has shown how humans have migrated from
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one country
into
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another in the past few centuries leading to
development
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the development
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of trade and
culture
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pollination between different nations.
However
, still many
people
prefer to live in the same cities and countries of their birth. In
this
essay,
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would like to walk through some of
reasons
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for the same and
also
analyze the pros and cons associated
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it. Love for the
place
of birth is deeply rooted
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most of us, especially because we have spent our early childhood in
this
place
. In my opinion,
this
is one of the core reasons why some
people
do not migrate to other places as they attain adulthood.
Such
people
love to always have their friends and family
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by.
Moreover
, they share a special attachment of pride for the city and country they live in, and they like to spend their energy and time
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the development of their nation. There are several advantages of living in your
place
of birth,
firstly
you are living close to the
people
you love,
secondly
, you get a chance to participate in all the cultural festivals and
lastly
since you have a very good
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of the
place
, your chances of survival
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much better both professionally and personally.
For example
, it is easier to find a job as compared to an immigrant, travelling is much easier as you know all the possible routes and public transportation and so on. Migration has its own advantages, which non-migrating
people
can't enjoy.
Firstly
, as a
migrant
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you get to explore the new cities and the country where you reside.
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, you get a chance to explore multiple cultures of the world and not just stick to the single lifestyle and culture of your origin.
Finally
, they get to taste different cuisines and
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recipes
receipes
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recipes
vs those who shy away from migration. In conclusion,
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would like to say that immigration has its own disadvantages and advantages. Some
people
spend their entire lifetime in the same city while others become globe trotters spending several years of their life across many different nations.
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,
i
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would say what really matters is how nicely you lived your life ?
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many memories you have to cherish
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? and it really does not matter where you lived
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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