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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Recently,
business
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 world has charmed many youngsters and it is becoming more popular to run a start-up.
This
 has caused many individuals to choose to start their own
business
 rather than to work for a firm or organization due to the salary and the desire to have
work-life
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 balance.
However
, the lack of funding might pose a serious threat to the success of running a new
business
. There are a number of advantages that people can benefit from running their own
business
,
for
example
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 the high chance of gaining larger
capitals
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 and having a healthy work-life balance. The thought of obtaining
higher
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 salary is mainly caused by the experience of not being paid the right amount of money by the companies they work previously,
for
example
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 the
minimal
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 wages in the
regional
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 should be around IDR 2,5000,000 but the company only pays IDR 1,500,000.
Furthermore
, some companies tend to overwork their employees without giving extra money or reward for them. An example of
this
 event is nurses who usually work harder and longer because of
this
 pandemic situation,
that
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 would lead them to feel more stressed due to being overworked.
Although
 having your own start-up can be very beneficial, there are some possible drawbacks
of
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 building
their
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your
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 own
business
. The major issue is that you have to have a huge amount of money and resources to start your own
business
. Lacking
of
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funds and
sponsor
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sponsors
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 will make it hard to get good quality
of
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commodities, goods,
human
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 resources to support your own
business
. Even if you can manage to start building your start-up, it may go downfall in the middle of it and causes
bigger
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 loss. Not only that, many individuals choose to take a huge amount of loan to build their start-up which in the future they cannot predict whether
it
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will be a positive upcoming or a nightmare. To summarize,
create
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 your own
business
 might be a jackpot for some people who are ready to face every upcoming
events
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. Unfortunately, it can be the worst event for some individuals who are not preparing anything they need to build the start-up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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