Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, a growing number of

people

who are suffering from diseases and health issues, tend to use

alternative

remedies rather than going to hospitals. In my opinion,

this

is a negative trend as it likely going to

disaster

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consequences.

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, an increasing number of

people

are

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tend to find natural and home treatments, so it would get worsen the level of the disorder. Many

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alternative

medicines are not suitable for chronic diseases,

such

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disc

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, so when these self-

drived

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drive

driven

cures

used

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wrong

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way it may

lessens

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pain

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the

short-term

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but it deteriorate

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in the

long-term

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For example

, if you use

placebo

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to diminish the

pain

in your neck,

but

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it might not be a simple

pain

, maybe it is cervical

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pain

Secondly

, when

people

start using

alternative

medicines that have never been studied in

liboratory

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laboratory

under

supervision

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profesionalists

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professionalism

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, they unconsciously are going to believe in superstitions and

also

they spread these thoughts to the

people

around them,

therefore

, healthcare development will have deprived by

widespreading

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widespread

unhealthy home treatments.

For instance

, if someone who has cancer

use

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alternative

remedies

instead

of visiting

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a doctor

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, the science about types and levels of cancer

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not going to investigating and it will not get progress in finding a cure for cancer. In conclusion, considering the negative aspects of using

alternative

remedies, I believe it can

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catastrophice

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consequences

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consequences

, not only for

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health but

also

for science progressing.

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
access
personalized approach
holistic well-being
lack of regulation
evidence-based research
proper medical treatment

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