Some people think that the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the main reason for

schools

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is making

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good

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and

workers

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. They claim that the

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are the best places where the children will be grown up as well-educated and socialized

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and

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. I support

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idea because

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help

students

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become more mature

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. Despite the fact that

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have many roles, educational institutions provide the government with agreeable

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who conform

with

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the government’s tasks. The government of each

country

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needs community members who cooperate with official organizations without conflicts in order to perform

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tasks. For

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reason, since

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are established for public benefits,

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are the best place where governments offer

students

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educations

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tailored

with

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governments’ tastes.

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,

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the North

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Korea

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regime is always brainwashing their children

on

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the

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institutions to make them be grown up to be

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who are agreeable to

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government’s policies. Another reason is that

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produce particular labour that the

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needs. Each

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struggle with

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of some particular type of highly-trained labours

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as health care, IT and atomic engineering. Since

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are the places where

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number of

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are taught by just a few

of

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apply

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competent educators,

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cultivates

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pupils with

these kind

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this kind

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of advanced skills and

provides

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them with

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country

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the country

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as highly-trained

workers

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efficiently.

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, Canada decides to support financial

aids

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to the educational institutions in medical parts and promotes their medical policies that the wage of medical labours will be increased by 20

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to tackle the lack of supply of medical

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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that educational organizations

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responsible for not only

growing

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children tailored with governments

,

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but

also

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offer

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high quality

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human resources to society.