Countries should spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree

Nowadays ,there are several types of
transportation
that people can be used in speed ,safety and reaching
on
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their destinations
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without
traffic inflation and dangerous driving on the roads , and these are called railway
transportation
system and it has seen the tendency to progress in trains and high-speed metro
instead
of
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traditional form if
transportation
like local streets and subways ,so,I agree with providing the infrastructures of
metrolines
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metro lines
more than roads ,and I will confirm my opinion
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some
evidences
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.
First
, railways can be connected long distances
witought
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without
traffic phenomenon alongside passengers can be more secured from accidents and
dangerous
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of driving
in
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roads,
for example
,
japanes
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Japanese
engineeres
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engineers
have been conducted a survey that which is the preference of individual to travel by
the
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train or road and there is a tendency to use from
metroes
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metres
metros
metro
,at a result,
this
behaviour can be decreased in the percentages of accidental events in comparing past.
Second
, public
transportation
is more adapted
with
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the environment because pure energy resources have been used and decreased greenhouse gases ,so it will
prvented
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prevented
prevent
from global warming ,
for example
,
Germany
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engineers have
been
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established the new version of engine motors on their trains and they have been
successed
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succeeded
successes
reducing in production of greenhouse gases ,
however
, local accessible way is needed to connect domestic places for citizens ,but , these are more suitable in internal city
transportation
instead
of metro lines,so the size of a town is important to choose which form of ways are effective for people. To sum up, allocating national
budjet
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budget
must be more spent on
high speed
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rail ways
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railways
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that are secure and convenient alongside
of
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connecting long distances in little time ,
furthermore
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this
structure
are
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adapted with the planet.
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