3. Some people think that it should be mandatory for student to perform unpaid community service to graduate
Nowadays,
Many
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many
people
suggest that social activities
such
as cleaning Add an article
the garden
garden
and teaching younger Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
people
should be include
to study courses. While some other think Change the verb form
be included
this
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this activity
these activities
activities
may make some student feels stresses
. From my point of view, I agree with the latter view. In the following paragraphs, the reason to support my opinion will be discussed in detail.
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Initially
, unpaid community service has many advantages. It promote
social skills Change the verb form
promotes
for instance
communication skill and time management skill. Because the
have to communicate with many Correct your spelling
they
people
. Moreover
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self-confidence
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pupils
do
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does
volunteering
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volunteer
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example
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,example
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and teaching Replace the word
donations
to
poor children. Change preposition
apply
The society
will gain a lot of Correct article usage
Society
benefit
from Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
this
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these
activities
.
On the other hand
, Putting social activities
in study courses may cause more drawback
than Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
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an advantage
advantage
. Because the student Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
have
main duties to do Change the verb form
has
such
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studying
. After Change the form of the verb
study
that
it will reduce their energy by doing Add a comma
,that
this
program. Moreover
they do not have time to find what they Add a comma
,Moreover
actually
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are actually
interest
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interested
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in that
important
for their future. Another reason is the government should responsible for their real duties Add a missing verb
is important
that is
provide
facilities to Fix the infinitive
to provide
people
who really need it
and manage our societies better or support social Correct pronoun usage
them
activities
by making the
campaign for persuading Correct article usage
a
people
who really want to do this
.
In conclusion, unpaid community service should not be a graduation requirement. Although
it promote
many skills for student, it Change the verb form
promotes
reduce
time and energy for them. So it Change the verb form
reduces
suitable
for Add a missing verb
is suitable
people
who actually want to do it. And the government should be a
main part to support Change the article
the
this
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