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One of the best methods to motivate and encourage workers is to pay them according to what they produce or sell. Do you think this is the best method?

#methods #workers #method
Workers
 are
backbone
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 of any
organisation
.If any company wants to be successful
they
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 must motivate and encourage
their
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workers
time
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 to
time
. There are many theories regarding
workers
.Some people think that
employees
 should
kept
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at
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 their place.So it is a debatable issue.But my opinion is that
employees
 must be encouraged and motivated.
Their
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 are
numbers
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 of methods by which we motivate and encourage them.But the best way is to pay them on
time
.If they are paid
on
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timely
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 they always keep their
time
 and focus on
development
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the development
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 of the
organisation
.Every company and Organisations develop only by
workers
 or their
employees
.Any company have two levels like upper one is managerial and
lower
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the lower
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 level is
employees
.
Managerial
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 role is to control or make decisions and their lower level and the role of
lower
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the lower
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 level is to follow
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instructuon
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instruction
instructions
 of their managers and implement the decision taken by
higher
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 authority.So,the main burden is on the
employees
.
Organisation
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 whose
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employee
employees
emoloyee
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employees
 are never encouraged
they
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never stay in the competition.
Therefore
,they should be encouraged like talking to them.Send them appraisal
certificate
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 timely for their work.Talk to their family members.The best way is to give them pay
time
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 to
time
,
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because every employee works for
salary
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a salary
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.And if they get salary and incentives timely
the
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they
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 put their whole effort in the
organisation
.
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