Some people believe that there are various reasons that can motivate a person to keep working for the same company whereas others say that money is the main reason which gives motivation. Do you agree or disagree?

Some person
have
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motivate
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for working in
a
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international
company
, the primary reason is
salary
,I agree totally
,
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because when
every one
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have
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high
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a high
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income
, he or she has power in
company
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the company
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and
quality
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a quality
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life
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.
To begin
eith
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with
,A person with
high
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salary
can give
high
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role in
company
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the company
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, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that employer and supervisor have more payment than the others and I think when people have power work better than the other who work on that
company
and people who get
salary
low. more over,they usually search
in
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a
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internet or recruitment agencies which they
like
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find
new
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a new
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job
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jobs
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with high
income
,
an other
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another
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main reason is that
high
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a high
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salary
can cause High quality of life
,
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when people increase
income
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their income
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, they don’t have
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a problem
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problem
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for
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living, they can work better,
focous
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focus
to
company
goal and they try a lot and
hard working
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increase motivate.
For
instance
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I moved to
big
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the big
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city and I could not keep my job ,because I don’t
have
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motivate
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and they gave me
minimum
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a minimum
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salary
. In conclusion, the main reason
of
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staying in
Previous
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the Previous
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company
is money because high
income
means high power and quality
life
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of life
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in a corporation.
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