Some people believe that money is the major source of happiness. Do you agree or disagree.
In the contemporary epoch,
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proponents hold the view that doing only things that they are familiar with, opponents and I have Correct your spelling
whilst
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diverse
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However
, my contention will be farther
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On the one hand, trying new Correct your spelling
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foods
or visiting new places sounds very enjoyable. For example
, some people
spend their vacation in a different country every year, They think discovering new places and new cultures are
enjoyable. Correct subject-verb agreement
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they do not hesitate to try unique Add a comma
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foods
like rabbit leg or duck. They say that these kind of foods
are interesting and extends my knowledge.
On the other hand
, some people
especially those who have different kinds of preferences do not prefer to go to new places and try new foods
. They feel safe when they repeat the action that they always like. In this
behaviour, there is no chance to dislike. For example
, some people
make reservations in the same hotel that they had stayed in every year. They say that we do not want to take the risk of dissatisfaction with the new one. Also
, some foods
do not fit everyone in different aspects. Some people
suffer from food allergies and high blood pressure. Because of ,this
they feel confident when they stick with the same diet.
In conclusion, after the essay has manifested the above mentioned
points, it can be reiterated that trying to do new things is quite enjoyable. Add a hyphen
above-mentioned
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find
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite