Some people believe that money is the major source of happiness. Do you agree or disagree.

In the contemporary epoch,
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whilst
proponents hold the view that doing only things that they are familiar with, opponents and I have
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a diverse
diverse
adiverse
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diverse
view
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.
However
, my contention will be
farther
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explained. On the one hand, trying new
foods
or visiting new places sounds very enjoyable.
For example
, some
people
spend their vacation in a different country every year, They think discovering new places and new cultures
are
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enjoyable.
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they do not hesitate to try unique
foods
like rabbit leg or duck. They say that these kind of
foods
are interesting and extends my knowledge.
On the other hand
, some
people
especially those who have different kinds of preferences do not prefer to go to new places and try new
foods
. They feel safe when they repeat the action that they always like. In
this
behaviour, there is no chance to dislike.
For example
, some
people
make reservations in the same hotel that they had stayed in every year. They say that we do not want to take the risk of dissatisfaction with the new one.
Also
, some
foods
do not fit everyone in different aspects. Some
people
suffer from food allergies and high blood pressure. Because of ,
this
they feel confident when they stick with the same diet. In conclusion, after the essay has manifested the
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points, it can be reiterated that trying to do new things is quite enjoyable.
Therefore
, it is believed that everyone
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try
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new things to
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he
find
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a chance to do them.
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