The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these energy sources in remote and untouched natural places. Do you think the advantages of locating oil and gas in these areas outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these places?

As the demands for
fossile
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fuel and
gas
are incredibly increasing, experts start to calculate the profit and loss for pioneering energy sources. Some experts
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that there is no advantage to
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the resources because the transporting fees are heavily expensive. Other people claim that there are hordes of profits if there are
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amount of natural fule. I support
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the idea.
First
of all, there are more likely tons of
oil
and
gas
in distance and unknown places. Massive
amount
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of fossil fuels
are
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likely to be buried in
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lands
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far away from civilized cities. And some countries don't
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possess
posess
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any of them in their area. So, even if
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countries pay
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money for the delivery fees, they are always trying to import the natural
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fuels
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because the profits absolutely outweigh the amount of transportation fee.
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, in order for Germany to import
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natural
gas
from Russia, Germany is willing to pay
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the installation fee for the natural
gas
pipeline under the ocean.
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, South Korea
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doesn't have
oil
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the transportation fee.
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, the investment
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extracting
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oil
and
gas
are increasing. The natural resources tend to be in the deel level of
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, so advanced technologies are
definetely
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nessary
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necessary
to pump it out to the human world.
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, the investment for taking the raw resources from the corporation will be risen up.
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, since human powers are vital factors to operate the extracting machines, the boundary of
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is naturally formed.
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city
Doha in Katar is
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city
formed by
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money. The government of Katar advertise
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tons of
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to
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corporation all over the globe, and Doha
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has nothing but the desert becomes one of the richest
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in the world. In conclusion, despite the fact that some people agree that there are no benefits to
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the raw energies in the
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district, I believe finding the fossil
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from
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far places
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more beneficial.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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