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These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teacher, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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For the past decades,
teachers
 was less interesting to many
people
. More and more
people
 do not want to become
teachers
, especially in secondary schools. In fact, some
people
 contend that the rate of
people
 becoming
teachers
 is the lowest it has been.
This
 essay will present the underlying cause of
this
 phenomenon and propose a practical solution to tackle
this
 problem. There are several factors leading to
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the teaching
job
 is not well-paid, especially in developing countries
such
 as Vietnam. As the financial need is increasing significantly and the cost of everything is climbing, not many
people
 dare to have a
job
 that does not have a high salary.
Secondly
,
although
 teaching students is an ethical action, it requires a lot of qualities. To be more specific, to be a decent teacher, particularly in secondary schools, he/she needs to have a great teaching method, they have to make sure that their lectures are interesting and easy to understand. Unfortunately, many
people
 in my country can not qualify for that requirement. Luckily, a number of solutions can be adopted to address the problem.
First
, the government should encourage
people
 to be
teachers
 by explaining the importance of teaching kids. By encouraging
people
 how important it is, more
people
 will give their respect to
this
job
 and decide to be a teacher.
Second
, there should be legislation about increasing the salary of the teaching
job
. Teaching is a respectful and difficult
job
. So the authorities should thank them by letting them have
the
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 higher living standard. In conclusion, not being well-paid is the main reason for
this
 problem. If not addressed immediately,
this
 phenomenon will have an overreaching effect on society, not just individuals.
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