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computer these days can translate all kinds of language with greatee accuracy.Hence, our children will not need to learn more language in the future. Do you agree or disagree?

#computer #kinds #language #greatee #accuracy #children #future
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It is true that nowadays, computers like a laptop can translate
avarious
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various
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 with awesome accuracy which maybe lead to our
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 generation do not need to study more foreign
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 in upcoming days. But it seems to me that the advantages of learning a foreign
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outweigh
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outweigh
 the disadvantages of not learning.
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 the one hand, the ignorance of learning a lot of
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 would help to reduce academic stress on studying
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absolutely
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absolutely
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 itself.
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student
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 could spend more time to relax
themselves
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or
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 something more enjoyable like sports, playing
a computer games
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computer games
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, and
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watching
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watching
 movies.
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, in terms of
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, the
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 could concentrate on
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another subject
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 like mother
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language
langauge
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language
 which
help
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 to love their unique culture and affect
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 patriotism.
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learning more
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 effect
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economical
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. because
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a student
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student
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 who can speak
a
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various
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 easily adapt
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globalization
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a globaliztion
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globaliztion
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globalisation
 environment. It helps
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student
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 who becomes the master of a
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national
 future economy to gain enormous contract in the overseas.
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 it makes
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 to make foreign friends
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 with computerized
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 skills. I think it is the best way to make friends from person to person with direct conversation. To sum up, I guess that learning more
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 for our students has more merits than drawbacks, Not only
educational
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aspect
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, but
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economic
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. So, we have to encourage our students to learn more
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, and I think that it would be our society more rich and cultural.
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